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My two cents, though I don't deserve to give them... hm... "that way/the ebb and flow we long for" ... is this supposed to be the way? The line "undone seams" confused me at first, but on second or third reading I thought I got what you were trying to say. Is it just one more image of coming undone?
I really like it, by the way.
Well it depends on how it is read, I meant for it to read as
you are
the proof of my existence that way
and not
the way the ebb and flow
but that's what I get for disregarding punctuation, really
Yes it is
Thanks again for your time your very kind words. (you just type < sub> enter any text without the spaces) much like html formatting.
You are super!
Quite the contrary. The piece is all the better for it.
Oh yes, the flowers definitely aren't there to depict the poem's direction, that's for sure.
You are beautiful, darling!
Thank you for introducing me to such a stunning writer! I'll be sure to lurk around her gallery soon enough!