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                                             {the words that let go of
                                              their letters tangle and tumble
                                              in foxtrots and viennese trances
                                              to and fro

                                              and he takes hold of me}


                                              i am roses after rainfall
                                              blushing in almost-autumn air              
                                              as your forehand faintly taps
                                              upon the tender skin that wraps
                                              around my decolletage

                                              remind me of the words your perfume
                                              poisons out, out


                                             {and like strings of a violin
                                              violent and fluid
                                              so is my pulse
                                              in tremolo

                                              and he is all over me}


                                              i am squirming dew drops
                                              atop the almost-lips of lilies
                                              in solemn moments

                                              left to my unspoken madness
                                              i fall out, out
Kalimat- is Arabic for "Words"
also one of the greatest songs by the legendary
Majida Al-Roumi 
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner 4 days ago   Writer
Love, this piece is truly devine, I cannot quote you a favourite part, as I was entranced by every word - so delicate and ethereal :heart:
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primalfuryan Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Professional General Artist
:iconaparazita-r::iconsquirrelflight-77:Your artwork has been graciously featured in Titans Genuine Literature feature ,stay wonderful!Hug:iconsquirrelflight-77::iconaparazita-r:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
that second parenthesis though :heart:
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cality Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The second part that's in parentheses is just gorgeous. :heart: :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014   General Artist

ah, i'm so very pleased to know you found it so, sweetheart! :love:

thank you so much for always being an awesome friend and critic! :tighthug: 

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cality Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Student Writer
I LOVE the parenthesis. :heart:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014   General Artist
i'm so glad you do, darling! thank you! :love:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
{and like strings of a violin
                                              violent and fluid
                                              so is my pulse
                                              in tremolo

                                              and he is all over me}


Wow
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