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I lace my skin up like a corset, peel back the blinds on my eyelids, and take a step forward, waking from the poppies to the
                    lightning bug glow of truth tapping on my eardrums.

In front of the mirror I stand, but what I notice is not the awkward crook of my nose or butterfly lashes. I look into the lighted mirror as if searching for answers hidden under
Ribbon-like sets of
                                    veins, arteries and nerves.

Sometimes it all flows correctly; sometimes everything becomes
     knotted up in all the wrong places.  Skin toughened by beatings brought about by the
                             harsh world
around me. Yet it is the same skin that is softened by the warm touch of friendship and family.

An under-achieving mind, wandering and corroding in my daydreams of true love, the pursuit of happiness, and hopeless wishes to save the waking world.
An overworked heart, squeezing out far too many bloodied tears; it has been
                             patched up and reworked more than any first-time quilt makers' handiwork.
An erratic soul, constantly withering and being brought back to life at the mercy of lies and truth.

It's sad when your world is nothing but fabric & when you open your eyes you're just lost in the sent-spinning moon. I'll
                          close them
                                                          for a while until the particles align and the air doesn't feel so false. I hear honesty from bones and fingernails and the hairs on my arms, I hear truth in newborn babies that bubble staccatos and legatos,
                      And so I hope that we were not made for deceit.

                                                                                 And for once I'm starting to trust myself.

We live in a cosmos where it can never be about only you and me or just you or just me:

     This erratic, chaotic, anaerobic, revolving oblate spheroid is home to even more
                                                         sand-spec existences
                                      than we could ever care to know about.

I'll live with nimbus sparse between my toes, ballads of being resonating through
                                        my ribs, and hope
                                                      grounded in the crowns of my teeth.
Written by me and the lovely :iconeggshells-and-paint::heart:

We decided to keep you guys guessing about who wrote which part :la:
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I WOULD SUPER LOVE TO SEE COMMENTS, THANK YOU!!:heart:
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:iconcatwithwings:
CatWithWings Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013  Student General Artist
This is amazing. I love the imagery in the piece. :)
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013   General Artist
thank you so very much, lovely soul :heart: 
i'm glad you enjoyed the read! :thanks:
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
As I read through this wonderful piece of literature, I found myself envious that I have not written anything of this caliber. It makes me want to push the boundaries of my own work.

Beautiful poem about self introspection and trying to understand not only ourselves, but how we fit into the world around us.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012   General Artist
Allow me to start off by thanking you for your lovely words and really, far too high of praise. I am absolutely humbled by you:heart:

I am so glad you were able to enjoy the read, truly nothing to me (as a writer-poet wannabee) can be more important then that fact alone! :thanks:
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012
You are most welcome.
I was just stating exactly what I was feeling as I read this and dont feel it was "too high of praise" at all.
Please continue the excellent work.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so very much! :huggle:
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful imagery y'all pieced together; very unique and refreshing.

This line especially stuck out, long past the last word was read:
And so I hope that we were not made for deceit. —I just love the strength and pointedness of that among all the imagery.

Congrats on the DD! :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so very kindly for your lovely words, pretty person! :squee:

I am so glad to hear you've enjoyed that bit, I truly am:heart:

Thanks again, dear friend! :tighthug:
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Many welcomes to youuuuu, pretty poet! :hug:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012   General Artist
:heart:
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Bad--Wolf--Bay Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
I love the first line: "I lace my skin up like a corset, peel back the blinds on my eyelids, and take a step forward, waking from the poppies to the
lightning bug glow of truth tapping on my eardrums." It's just amazing.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so very much for taking the time to leave such lovely words. I am so glad you enjoyed the read!:heart:
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:iconkalinereine:
KalineReine Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Professional Writer
This is amazingly beautiful... The entire thing. I am just in awe...
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so very much for your humbling praise, sweet person! :huggle:
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:iconkalinereine:
KalineReine Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Professional Writer
You're welcome... :huggle:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
:heart:
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myoung4828 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
Ah, just noticed this is a joint venture of authorship, explains my inability to grasp the intent. It seems to embrace 2 different perspectives, one focused on internal condition, the other greatly expanded to the grasp of the human condition. But the imagery sure caught my attention.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and comment on my work, I truly appreciate it! :hug:
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kori-hibana Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Student General Artist
ooohhh so it's a collab; I was confuzzled for a second when I saw the exact same DD and thought my computer just died or something
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
Yes it is, you darling confuzzled creature, you! :giggle:
:love:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
so well-deserved! congratulations!
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
Thank you ever so much, dear friend! :love:
I'm over the moon! :la:
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:iconthegraveyardkey:
TheGraveyardKey Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Did you get two DDs today?:omg: you deserve it.
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
Nope, the other one is for my collab partner but still, isn't it all so amazing? :love:
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:iconthegraveyardkey:
TheGraveyardKey Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ya, i've never seen that before.
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
:D
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:iconmegane-whim:
Megane-Whim Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Everythin's just right. I like the intensity in the words, very strong.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
Thank you for your deeply humbling praise, I'm thrilled to know you've enjoyed the read! :love:
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:iconvenry:
Venry Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Student General Artist
Gorgeous work :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so much, gorgeous lady! :love:
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:iconvenry:
Venry Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Student General Artist
:iconsweethugplz:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
:iconrubcheeksplz:
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:iconvenry:
Venry Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student General Artist
:stinkeye: That is unbearably adorable
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012   General Artist
IKR! :XD:
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   Writer
congratulations on the well-deserved DD :heart:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
Thank you ever so kindly, love:heart:
Goodness, this is still so very surreal! :huggle:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   Writer
:iconcongratsddplz: This looks just right to me. Funny how it fits converations had and more to come, that little thing called "life." Thank you. :+fav:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so very much, precious person! :huggle:
I am just beaming right now! :love:
Funny indeed. :giggle:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   Writer
:iconyourewelcomesignplz: ...with... :iconfireworkplz: ...everywhere. (:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
:iconlovehugplz:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   Writer
:icongrin--plz:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
:iconchibikylesocuteplz:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   Writer
lol
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:iconcarmalain7:
Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
Many congratulations to you, miss, you've certainly earned this honor a thousand thymes over - which makes it extra awesome that it has found you.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
Thank you very much, dear sir! I am ever so humbled by your praise. :huggle:
It still hasn't sunk in, to be honest. I still can't believe I just got my first DD:heart:
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
That song made the revival of the decade what with glee fans zombi-ying the earth :giggle:
I've always been a Journey fan though and old rock is the equivalent of comfort food for the ears, methinks.:iconlabeatplz:

Thank you for the comfort music, lovely friend:heart:
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
Yeah, i saw the Glee link when i looked up the song before the actual Journey one even came up which was both surprising, as i don't follow Glee and had no idea that they had even covered the track, and disheartening because you'd think Journey would get more credit, what for all actually writing the song and whatnot.

Regardless, glad to hear that your musical tastes are as sharp as your writings, good miss.
And, as if you needed any comforting, haha. =p
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012   General Artist
I know right! :no:

Well, another aspect of comfort food, is to drug you into that 'feel good' confidence boosting feeling I've been needing, so thank you for that. :giggle:
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
In that case, keep feelin' good, fair lass.
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