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             can you hear my muted, mutant screams?
                   

      it is in a form of cry shriveling up my lungs

                  leaking foam from my parted lips and panting tongue

              drying up my eyes and making me collapse
                                   (in the coal mines of my mind, all the goddamn time)

                   
                   
             you once said that you had heard my voice

      being whispered in the evening winds
           
                        carried by the cooing doves
                                 
                  like my name was your song
                        (forever calling to lost loves)

                  until the last stretch of its infinitely looped three-minute play
                     

             i held unto false hope, every step of the way
Free verse :heart:

Title taken from a line from Fall Out Boy's
"I'm like a lawyer with the way I'm always trying to get you off"
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
dat fallout boy song <3

me and you
setting in a honeymoon
if I woke up next to you
if I woke up next to you :)))
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013   General Artist
IKR <3 <3 <3
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chancerox Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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fall out boy. :heart: ______

(in the coal mines of my mind, all the goddamn time) : this is my favorite line. i love the rhyming. :) 
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   General Artist
tahnk you so much, i am thrilled to hear that, kind soul. :heart:
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013
The first FOB song I ever liked. :D 
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   General Artist
ah, really? i'm glad to hear that. :XD:
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
Yep! :D
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Damn, I love this.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   General Artist
not as much as ILY though. :heart:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is awesome, chaotic, and just............wooo. Awesome, awesome. :heart:
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