i am no artist's muse,
i am no ship's harbor
i am no hero's weaker heel,
i am no good earth's flower
i have never been your lover
nor have i ever kissed you,
- not even once
though i dream of you (c)love-scented,
with lips shaped like a lucky (c)lover's-
kissing you and to be kissed by you
over and
over
i can never profess,
not even confess
note:
even to myself
i stay standing, (b)raving the cold nights,
pretty much batty and bootless
yet again,
the absence of you weighs metric tons on my
ringing ear,
shivering nape, and
repressed shoulder
you dam(n) me with
your body;
you are my river's boulder,
untapped territory,
and undefined border
And this:
though i dream of you (c)love-scented,
with lips shaped like a lucky (c)lover's-
kissing you and to be kissed by you
over and
over
is a beautiful image. I had a certain boy stuck in my head, the longing to kiss and share that intimacy with the person you love, while stuck in the fear that you cannot profess> nor confess the truth to that person.
Basically: you really hit the nail on the head with this.
And: i am no good earth's flower - I want freaking more of this!!!!!!! This sentiment deserves an entire other poem!!
And here is my argument for keeping the typography (even though I still say it's a bit distracting):
the final stanza:
you dam(n) me with
your body;
you are my river's boulder,
untapped territory,
and undefined border
The image burned so gorgeously in my brain by the typography play in this final stanza is fabulous. I mean: perfect.
I love this piece; can't wait to see its edits!!
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