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i am no artist's muse,
i am no ship's harbor
i am no hero's weaker heel,
i am no good earth's flower
i have never been your lover
nor have i ever kissed you,
- not even once
though i dream of you (c)love-scented,
with lips shaped like a lucky (c)lover's-
kissing you and to be kissed by you
over and
over
i can never profess,
not even confess
note:
even to myself
i stay standing, (b)raving the cold nights,
pretty much batty and bootless
yet again,
the absence of you weighs metric tons on my
ringing ear,
shivering nape, and
repressed shoulder
you dam(n) me with
your body;
you are my river's boulder,
untapped territory,
and undefined border
i am no ship's harbor
i am no hero's weaker heel,
i am no good earth's flower
i have never been your lover
nor have i ever kissed you,
- not even once
though i dream of you (c)love-scented,
with lips shaped like a lucky (c)lover's-
kissing you and to be kissed by you
over and
over
i can never profess,
not even confess
note:
even to myself
i stay standing, (b)raving the cold nights,
pretty much batty and bootless
yet again,
the absence of you weighs metric tons on my
ringing ear,
shivering nape, and
repressed shoulder
you dam(n) me with
your body;
you are my river's boulder,
untapped territory,
and undefined border
Literature
Compendium
1.
Pair of lovers:
the greyed doves perch,
an old married couple.
2.
Lonely navigator—
a bumblebee lands, graceless;
the flower droops.
3.
The rain-swollen sky
bruised purple, and darkening:
work of angry gods.
4.
Lanterns released—
a thousand midnight suns;
night becomes day.
5.
Kitchen cyclamen,
yearning for raindrops
a window away.
6.
Silver dragon
weaving through fields—
overflowed river.
7.
Afternoon sun
meets the stained glass door—
light-dance ensues.
8.
Night sky, aglow:
yellow gleaming of the
lightbulb moon.
9.
Citrus silence:
an afternoon respite
by the lemon tree.
Literature
confessional
they say sad girls change their hair color
and forgive their monsters.
i change my morals
and become one.
Literature
confession
If I could, I wouldn't hesitate
to feel
the heft and heat
of everything inside you;
I'd ferret out
your sins,
I'd sell indulgences, I'd sew
coins
into the lining of your skin.
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Am I making any sense to you at all?
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Your feedback, as always,
is both highly anticipated and appreciated.
COMMENTS ARE ALWAYS, ALWAYS LOVED!! THANK YOU!!
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Critique:
Is the formatting too much of a distraction?
Am I making any sense to you at all?
Two-cents please?
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I like the formatting...but it might be a bit distracting.
And this:
though i dream of you (c)love-scented,
with lips shaped like a lucky (c)lover's-
kissing you and to be kissed by you
over and
over
is a beautiful image. I had a certain boy stuck in my head, the longing to kiss and share that intimacy with the person you love, while stuck in the fear that you cannot profess</> nor confess the truth to that person.
Basically: you really hit the nail on the head with this.
And: i am no good earth's flower - I want freaking more of this!!!!!!! This sentiment deserves an entire other poem!! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="26" height="17" alt="" title="Love"/>
And here is my argument for keeping the typography (even though I still say it's a bit distracting):
the final stanza:
you dam(n) me with
your body;
you are my river's boulder,
untapped territory,
and undefined border
The image burned so gorgeously in my brain by the typography play in this final stanza is fabulous. I mean: perfect.
I love this piece; can't wait to see its edits!! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)"/>